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Over the past years, my pre-med students have taught me what exceptionally beautiful writing can come from describing rural life and, thereby, rural healthcare.

It comes up because many of my students wish to return to their home communities — or ones like them — once they’ve become doctors, which is something they want to (and should) convey in their personal statements.

However, I have noticed that it usually takes a while for this beauty to surface. Often, these writers are uncomfortable describing their rural roots. Maybe they feel overwhelmed by the prospect of capturing their community’s essence. Maybe they don’t want their communities to be judged. Maybe they don’t want to be judged either and come across as “too country.”

The result is their first efforts are often generic pictures of where they come from, instead of active, vivid ones. They mention agriculture. They mention doctor shortages. They mention food deserts. They mention the opioid crisis.

The problem, of course, is none of that is particularly distinctive and, thus, memorable. And in your med school personal statement, you want every word of your essay to stick with your reader.

But, how to do that in your med school personal statement? Here are four tips.

WRITE ABOUT YOUR PEOPLE AND PLACES

In order to convey that you love rural living and are committed to rural healthcare, I want you to write a longish paragraph about what your community looks like and means to you. It’s a way of showing your reader that you are intrinsically tied to rural life (and rural healthcare) and understand it. In order to do that, I often recommend naming your places and naming your people. That means answering questions like the following. What:

  • is your home community called (you’d be amazed at how many students just say, “my town”)?
  • is the name of an important street?
  • is the name of some of the seminal businesses in your town?
  • do people do in their free time?
  • do they do on Saturday night?
  • do they do Sunday morning?
  • restaurant do they go to? What do they eat?
  • do they drink? (One student mentioned Ale-8, which is a Kentucky-made cola)
  • is the mascot of the high school? (In my town, strangely enough, we have the Maroons (a pirate) and the Briar Jumpers (a rabbit).)
  • is the name of a long-time teacher at the high school?
  • is a little known fact about your town? (An example, a bakery in London, Ky., makes 60,000 honey buns an hour. As a result, East Fourth Street constantly smells like yeast and sugar.)
  • is the name of an important doctor in town? What is his or her practice like?
  • is the name of the newspaper?
  • is the name of the local lake? The quarry? A creek or a river?
  • do people do for a living?
  • traditions do they have at Christmas?
  • annual festival does everyone attend?
  • team do they cheer for?
  • do the buildings look like?
  • place do the high school students congregate?
  • does the hospital look like? How big is it? Do you have one? How many beds?

"Possums" can be personal statement gold.

LOOK FOR THE POSSUMS

The other day, I was working with a student who said she wanted to go back to her Appalachian community because she wants a close connection to her patients, one that extends beyond the usual doctor-patient relationship. Buried way at the bottom of her essay was a detail about how she had witnessed a rural doctor have a conversation with a patient about her pet possum. Apparently, it was a fun chat in which the patient enthusiastically gave the doctor a thorough update.

As soon as I saw it, I knew that essay needed to start with that possum. Why? Well, in part, because you couldn’t possibly make that up and so the reader knows immediately you’re being as honest and forthright as you can be. But also, it was a detail that was memorable, one that set a tone that was as genial as that doctor-patient conversation apparently was.

Another student wrote about how she saw a doctor receive a cooler full of crappie (that’s a fish in Kentucky) as a Christmas gift. Another wrote about how she’d seen a patient come into his family doctor hoping to get help for his prized rooster.

These are all likewise authentic looks into the beauty that can come out of rural healthcare.

So as you write about your home community and your affinity for rural healthcare, I want you to scour, I mean scour, your memories of your shadowing experiences. I want to hear these conversations, I want to witness these gifts, I want to listen to you tell me about what patients needed.

Using an apt statistic can strengthen your piece.

USE STATISTICS

Often, students will write about tough statistics that apply to the health (or lack thereof) of their rural communities. But if you’re going to use a statistic, be specific and cite a source. It can be something as brief as “According to the CDC,” or “A study published in JAMA found,” but either way, it should be something that your reader, if interested, should be able to Google.

When using a statistic, also make sure that it relates specifically to what you’re writing about. For example, I had one student who wanted to be an OB/GYN in eastern Kentucky. Her ultimate mission is to work at a facility that offers help to pregnant patients who struggle with addiction. In her first draft, she included a statistic about the professional health care shortage in Kentucky. Pretty good idea, right? Except then she decided to drill down further. In her final draft, she instead included a statistic about how many counties in Kentucky are without a practicing OB/GYN. More specific and, thus, more effective.

ADDRESS HOW YOU WILL CONTRIBUTE

It’s one thing to want to get into rural healthcare because you want a close relationship to your patients, it’s another to show how you will contribute. If you really want to impress your reader, write about what plans you have to address specific issues. What will your practice look like in this place? How will you address patient needs (and, please, don’t just say you’ll do so by attending to both their physical and emotional health)? What resources will you use and guide patients to? What programs would you like to implement? What programs have you seen work? What kind of care have you witnessed that you plan to emulate?

This will not only allow you to show your character, it will give your reader an opportunity to see how your brain works, which is very useful information.

Now. Since you’re a pre-med with, likely, only shadowing experience, it’s a big ask to explain how you’re going to fix the world — and you don’t want to come across as arrogant. But if you have a passion for community wellness in rural healthcare and you have some specific ideas for how to improve it, there has never been a better place than your med school personal statement to write about it.

FINALLY …

If you’re looking for inspiration, please click here to read a truly gorgeous piece of writing by a doctor about her rural patients.

And remember, writing about your rural life and your commitment to rural healthcare is not only a way for you to show your personality and character, it’s a way to be memorable to your reader. If you continue to struggle with getting to the root of that part of your story, please don’t hesitate to contact me at tara@swayessay.com.